laughter is magical
it is assonance
to songs in alphabetical
resonance
words poetical
and tone symmetrical
smiles spiral
to look up to this master
that not only captures
tear drops
but styles stroppy til they
learn to stop.
laughter is magical
it is assonance
to songs in alphabetical
resonance
words poetical
and tone symmetrical
smiles spiral
to look up to this master
that not only captures
tear drops
but styles stroppy til they
learn to stop.
Last edited by cacian; 05-20-2019 at 11:33 AM.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
Yay Cacian! And about time you wrote some poetry again. I haven't been around for many months, but your work has clearly continued to grow. What I sense is that your form is better able to contain your ebullience now (although I'll miss the old Cacian poems where I just never ever ever knew where the next line would bring me. But this is better as poetry.
My only criticism has to do with the word strop, which in English means a strap of leather attached to the handle of a straight razor. Either you meant something else, or strop has some other meaning I don't know. It's a great poem in any case.
Hello there Pompey Bum long time no seen!!!! so nice to see around posting again
And thank you the positive lovely feedback it means a lot to me.
By strop I meant
stroppy
I have changed it and put stroppy instead haha.
Thank you for pointing that out.
it may never try
but when it does it sigh
it is just that
good
it fly
You are welcome, Cacian. Lovely to talk with you comme d'habitude.