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    this

    laughter is magical
    it is assonance
    to songs in alphabetical
    resonance
    words poetical
    and tone symmetrical
    smiles spiral
    to look up to this master
    that not only captures
    tear drops
    but styles stroppy til they
    learn to stop.
    Last edited by cacian; 05-20-2019 at 11:33 AM.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Yay Cacian! And about time you wrote some poetry again. I haven't been around for many months, but your work has clearly continued to grow. What I sense is that your form is better able to contain your ebullience now (although I'll miss the old Cacian poems where I just never ever ever knew where the next line would bring me. But this is better as poetry.

    My only criticism has to do with the word strop, which in English means a strap of leather attached to the handle of a straight razor. Either you meant something else, or strop has some other meaning I don't know. It's a great poem in any case.
    And this from a man in a bunny suit.

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    Hello there Pompey Bum long time no seen!!!! so nice to see around posting again
    And thank you the positive lovely feedback it means a lot to me.
    By strop I meant
    stroppy
    I have changed it and put stroppy instead haha.
    Thank you for pointing that out.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    You are welcome, Cacian. Lovely to talk with you comme d'habitude.
    And this from a man in a bunny suit.

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