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    Weather forecast

    Letís get the weather forecast now,
    Following the settled spell
    Itís now unsettled
    Having been married Iím now divorced
    I was hungry now Iím full
    I brushed my teeth
    Now I have dirty teeth
    I was Young now Iím old
    I was hard now Iím soft
    People are gone forever
    Nobody says anything
    I awoke this morning
    for the 19,615th time
    And did much the same
    Give or take
    I could set my coat on fire
    Or murder somebody
    Or help a stranger
    Or catch a plane to somewhere
    Sharpen a pencil
    Until there is no pencil left
    Pretend I have a dog and walk it.
    But the weather is unsettled
    Following the settled spell
    So Iím doing nothing
    Whatsoever
    At all.

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Nice poem

    I loved your poem. Good stuff. Pretending to help a stranger may in some strange way lead to actually helping a stranger to pretend to help a stranger...Which is the more interesting thing? The stranger or The pretending?

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    As yours fooly has said of the years, your verses have a strong "voice." Another feature that's just occurred to me (after reading your Nov 7 posting) is your attempt to capture a spirit of place (setting) in a concrete way.

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    I liked the flow of the poem
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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