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    Registered User Delta40's Avatar
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    Split Deck

    No more sevens
    To miss a go
    When I canít pick up

    No more wild cards
    To change the suit
    When I can't put down

    No more aces
    To keep playing
    My hand

    No more shuffling
    Cutting
    Or dealing

    No more score keeping
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    I'm surprised that this little gem hasn't provoked more af a response, Delta. It's been languishing for a week and barely anyone has read it. What a crime.

    Well I have read it, And I like it. The economy of style and elegance of expression convey so much, with the simple metaphor of card games. The ambiguity leaves the reader speculating. Can this be a break up, or a new beginning. Both are possible and even simultaneously, though the use of split in the title implies the first option. Well done, Delta. Thanks for dropping your little enigma into my day.

    Live and be well - H

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    You're as perceptive as ever Hawk. Thank you for your review.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Agree with Hawk. Always a good starting point. Like that you are posting again. Glad I'm not the only one who can't quite tire of it.

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Enjoyed your poem, Delta.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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