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    space

    the space
    between us
    creates
    a vacuum of waste
    it is unable to detect
    which direction to take
    right
    left
    middle or straight
    and remains an abyss
    in which darkness
    lavish
    until erasure to a crevice
    aligns and forms a travis
    it releases the thorn
    and a message is born
    closeness is passage.
    Last edited by cacian; 09-24-2018 at 04:04 PM.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Enjoyed this poem very much cacian, especially the beginning and last line.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    tailor STATELY thank you
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Well done, cacian. Enjoyed very much.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Nice. What's a travis?

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    Well done, cacian. Enjoyed very much.
    Thank you Kiz_paws.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Quote Originally Posted by fudgetusk View Post
    Nice. What's a travis?
    Thank you fudgetusk and travis is this:
    I quote:

    ''Travis is mainly an English masculine given name of French origin. It is derived from the word "traverser" or "to cross", and was given to toll collectors who stood by a bridge or crossing.''
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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