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    the birbs and the dirds

    the birbs and the dirds
    in the garden with their wings
    pecking at the gravel
    loudly do they sings

    says a birb to a dird
    'i likes yer feathery colour'
    replies the dird to the birb
    'clearly you are the gentleman and the scholar'

    with that they sang their songs
    contrapuntal and discordant
    yet pleasant and
    quite accordant

    and went back to pecking gravel
    and stretching their little wings
    and being birbs and dirds
    and a couple of other things

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    Cute. The front lawn fronting my digs could use a couple more birds, but it sure is dirdy. Me only quibble w. yr ditty is that "colour" doesn't perfectly rhyme with "scholar." How 'bout "collar"?

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    Thanks Tailor

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    Thankyou Aunty

    Actually you partly right, and partly wrong.

    Whilst I must admit that the second (and third) stanza was originally completely different, as it was heading into a direction I wasn't happy with, when I came back for the rewrite I began with the nouns in the conventional running order) so as to make it seem the birbs and dirds weren't as sharp as their talons (far be it for me to cast aspersions however). But then I thought that maybe it would appear that it was the author at fault. So upon suddenly realizing that they didn't rhyme anyway I went with the inversion as a subtler way of saying the same thing.

    Whoo - lots of words for such an innocent little verse.

    Thanks again!

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    Thankyou Aunty

    Actually you are partly right, and partly wrong.

    Whilst I must admit that the second (and third) stanza was originally completely different, as it was heading into a direction I wasn't happy with, when I came back for the rewrite I began with the nouns in the conventional running order so as to make it seem the birbs and dirds weren't as sharp as their talons (far be it for me to cast aspersions however). But then I thought that maybe it would appear that it was the author at fault. So upon suddenly realizing that they didn't rhyme anyway I went with the inversion as a subtler way of saying the same thing.

    Whoo - lots of words for such an innocent little verse.

    Thanks again!

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    Classic MM. We are all wasted. Probably.

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    Thanks JB

    Actually discussing that phrase caused me to froogle it, and I found that my 'inversion' was actually the convention. I don't think I'd ever used it before, and now you can be certain I'm beginning to regret it. Damn internet!

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    What a fun little poem, thanks MM!
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