the birbs and the dirds

[MystyrMystyry]

the birbs and the dirds
in the garden with their wings
pecking at the gravel
loudly do they sings

says a birb to a dird
'i likes yer feathery colour'
replies the dird to the birb
'clearly you are the gentleman and the scholar'

with that they sang their songs
contrapuntal and discordant
yet pleasant and
quite accordant

and went back to pecking gravel
and stretching their little wings
and being birbs and dirds
and a couple of other things

[tailor STATELY]

Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY

[AuntShecky]

Cute. The front lawn fronting my digs could use a couple more birds, but it sure is dirdy. Me only quibble w. yr ditty is that "colour" doesn't perfectly rhyme with "scholar." How 'bout "collar"?

[MystyrMystyry]

Thanks Tailor

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Aunty

Actually you partly right, and partly wrong.

Whilst I must admit that the second (and third) stanza was originally completely different, as it was heading into a direction I wasn't happy with, when I came back for the rewrite I began with the nouns in the conventional running order) so as to make it seem the birbs and dirds weren't as sharp as their talons (far be it for me to cast aspersions however). But then I thought that maybe it would appear that it was the author at fault. So upon suddenly realizing that they didn't rhyme anyway I went with the inversion as a subtler way of saying the same thing.

Whoo - lots of words for such an innocent little verse.

Thanks again!

[MystyrMystyry]

Thankyou Aunty

Actually you are partly right, and partly wrong.

Whilst I must admit that the second (and third) stanza was originally completely different, as it was heading into a direction I wasn't happy with, when I came back for the rewrite I began with the nouns in the conventional running order so as to make it seem the birbs and dirds weren't as sharp as their talons (far be it for me to cast aspersions however). But then I thought that maybe it would appear that it was the author at fault. So upon suddenly realizing that they didn't rhyme anyway I went with the inversion as a subtler way of saying the same thing.

Whoo - lots of words for such an innocent little verse.

Thanks again!

[Jerrybaldy]

Classic MM. We are all wasted. Probably.

[MystyrMystyry]

......

[MystyrMystyry]

Thanks JB

Actually discussing that phrase caused me to froogle it, and I found that my 'inversion' was actually the convention. I don't think I'd ever used it before, and now you can be certain I'm beginning to regret it. Damn internet!

[kiz_paws]

What a fun little poem, thanks MM!