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    conception

    the immaculate
    conception
    is riddled with deception
    it does not move
    or thrust
    it just looks up
    to see
    if someone hard enough
    stares long enough
    it turns outstanding
    at all expense it is
    intending.
    Last edited by cacian; 07-13-2018 at 04:46 PM.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Another great one, Cacian.

    it does not move
    or thrust

    Exactly the kind of vivid, image-laden language I suggested you try. And the slant rhyme of thrust with up (in the subsequent line) is brilliant. Nice job!
    And this from a man in a bunny suit.

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    Pompey so glad you like this one !!
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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