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    My Poems

    wash away

    rain can’t wash away our apathy

    newspapers bleed multi-colored ink
    plastic bags take flight
    coffee-stained Styrofoam cups tumble by
    tin-cans weep rusty teardrops
    ten-cent bottle-returns lay unredeemed

    refuse scars our land
    garbage damns our streams
    trash curses our seas
    debris-islands terrorize our oceans

    snow doesn’t hide our wounds for long
    floods can’t cleanse our rivers
    hurricanes rage but fail too

    nothing can wash away our sin
    what will become of our paradise?
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    Amen to that.
    Great imagery.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    "snow doesn’t hide our wounds for long
    floods can’t cleanse our rivers
    hurricanes rage but fail too"

    Hurricanes rage but fail to, wow. It is hard to see the abuse from man to nature and what will make of our paradise. I agree with kit-paws powerful imagery and words.
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    "Rusty teardrops" is an extraordinary image. Nicely done.

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    Thanks All for your encouragement. Jack

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    Hi Jack. I enjoyed the opening particularly and the imagery, lost enthusiasm a bit when it became more obvious that there was a cause. The mess we are in didn’t need accentuating more than your imagery.
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    At least the opening piqued your interest.

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