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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    Eraser

    I was scented Japanese
    You had mascara
    And fire damaged knees
    Melted skin
    We ate chips and drank gin
    I bit your neck
    Before you could begin
    To stutter your name
    You were scented English rose
    And weed killer
    Tasted of summer grass
    And ice cream vanilla
    We swam in the pond
    With lily pads and beer cans
    Nearly drowned
    But id found you
    And when we f ucked
    Beneath the stars
    To the radio songs of passing cars
    You called his name not mine
    So I rubbed your melted knees
    Made out all was fine.
    Walking home alone
    I erased you from my mind.
    Last edited by Jerrybaldy; 06-20-2018 at 12:29 PM.

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    Good Jerrybaldy
    I enjoyed your poem .... it includes many dancing words .....So I rubbed your melted knees
    And it has a good end ... Erased you from my mind = that you're satisfied in what happened across the journey
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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    Thank you Mohammad. I think this one is ok

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    Ahem... Jerry, this poem is more than ok.
    Loved it!
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Loved it. the words rolled across the page and the reader follows them, transported.

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    Every time I come to this forum, I re-read this one! So, I believe it is time I comment.

    "Ouch" what a low blow to such a lovely mingle. Reminds me of the rebound effect. A person who hasn't fully recuperated from a breakup and is lying to themselves as well as the rebound on the intention of the date. If it was all clear and spoken out loud how it would hurt the person.

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