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    Crash

    I was driving when I died
    I heard the fireman say
    I hadn’t survived
    I can see the fir tree
    Air freshener
    And the blood on the screen
    And the bad moon
    But I hear the fireman say
    I hadn’t survived
    A snickers wrapper in the footwell
    And you havent survived
    Beside me
    Solitary magpie
    In the cherry tree
    Crumpled Lager can
    Broken glass
    Dj on the radio
    Giving a shout out to
    Disco Dan
    I need some sunshine or a cup of tea
    I’m bleeding
    From my ears
    Nobody here is older than me
    I have years
    Under my seat belt
    And black suede shoes
    I think a long time ago
    I cried
    Like a little boy scared of thunder
    I cried
    In fleshy mess
    And bloody glass
    I held your hand
    When the fireman said
    We hadn’t survived.

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy View Post
    I was driving when I died
    I heard the fireman say
    I hadn’t survived
    I can see the fir tree
    Air freshener
    And the blood on the screen
    And the bad moon
    But I hear the fireman say
    I hadn’t survived
    A snickers wrapper in the footwell
    And you havent survived
    Beside me
    Solitary magpie
    In the cherry tree
    Crumpled Lager can
    Broken glass
    Dj on the radio
    Giving a shout out to
    Disco Dan
    I need some sunshine or a cup of tea
    I’m bleeding
    From my ears
    Nobody here is older than me
    I have years
    Under my seat belt
    And black suede shoes
    I think a long time ago
    I cried
    Like a little boy scared of thunder
    I cried
    In fleshy mess
    And bloody glass
    I held your hand
    When the fireman said
    We hadn’t survived.
    Thanks for the poem jerrybaldy, we can be both dead and alive at the same time?
    warmestregards michael.
    I know nothing,and that is ALL.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy View Post
    I was driving when I died
    I heard the fireman say
    I hadn’t survived
    I can see the fir tree
    Air freshener
    And the blood on the screen
    And the bad moon
    But I hear the fireman say
    I hadn’t survived
    A snickers wrapper in the footwell
    And you havent survived
    Beside me
    Solitary magpie
    In the cherry tree
    Crumpled Lager can
    Broken glass
    Dj on the radio
    Giving a shout out to
    Disco Dan
    I need some sunshine or a cup of tea
    I’m bleeding
    From my ears
    Nobody here is older than me
    I have years
    Under my seat belt
    And black suede shoes
    I think a long time ago
    I cried
    Like a little boy scared of thunder
    I cried
    In fleshy mess
    And bloody glass
    I held your hand
    When the fireman said
    We hadn’t survived.
    Thanks for the poem jerrybaldy, we can be both dead and alive at the same time?
    warmestregards michael.
    I know nothing,and that is ALL.

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    This is an interesting point. We can perhaps be in the transition from life to death, which this poem expresses admirably.

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    An exceptionally good piece.

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    I love the emotions your poems evoke through pictures of points in time.

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    Thanks all I don’t suppose we will know until it’s too late to find out

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Thanks all I don’t suppose we will know until it’s too late to find out

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    It a cool deep poem Jerry. love it

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    Interesting theme and style.

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