Soft rain, hissing, cold.
Nothing it could ever say.
Behind the dawn, behind the world,
Your song so far away.
Soft rain, hissing, cold.
Nothing it could ever say.
Behind the dawn, behind the world,
Your song so far away.
Very nice Pb.
A bit of melancholy; a bit of faith (perhaps) evoked in your poem.
I'm pondering whether "hissing cold" might be a better alternative to "hissing, cold".
Oh how I love short poems with a grand vision.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor STATELY
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Thank you, Tailor. Yes, faith. But no, hissing like a serpent and cold like death. I placed them that way deliberately in contrast to the otherwise inviting soft rain, and I separated them to double the emphasis. Good call on the theme, though. Not surprised you'd catch it.
Thanks, Cacian.