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    soundless

    the human mind
    likes a challenge
    it analyses hidden
    beyond what is already
    a pattern

    the obvious always needy
    it seems it isn't easy

    so life intricates
    lays it down greedy

    the further down the
    cell glides to reach
    out for the out
    it will erupt about
    multiple choices
    of doubts

    it is not possible
    to reach plausible

    audible is not allowed
    deaf is the acceptable

    silence wraps it all
    because ignorance is
    a roar.
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    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Quote Originally Posted by cacian View Post
    the human mind
    likes a challenge
    it analyses hidden
    beyond what is already
    a pattern

    the obvious always needy
    it seems it isn't easy

    so life intricates
    lays it down greedy

    the further down the
    cell glides to reach
    out for the out
    it will erupt about
    multiple choice
    of doubt

    it is not possible
    to reach plausible

    audible is not allowed

    deaf is the acceptable
    silence wrapts it all
    because ignorance is
    a roar.
    Liked your poem cacian, soundless is echoed in mind while meditating.
    Regards Michael.
    I know nothing,and that is ALL.

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    Kirkpatrick for reading and the comment. I did not realise you meditated.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Quote Originally Posted by cacian View Post
    Kirkpatrick for reading and the comment. I did not realise you meditated.
    Indeed I do Meditate cacian, and have done so since 1974 forty-four years so far, have a teaching meditation thread here on this forum, look it up in you are interested cacian, it is for beginners, and its very eay to follow.

    Warmest regards Michael.
    I know nothing,and that is ALL.

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    silence wraps it all
    because ignorance is
    a roar.
    last stanza or indeed line not a full stanza as mentioned above; here silence wraps it all is good metaphor but to say because ignorance is a roar it seems to me not a suitable description ... I think because ignorance is its roof \ its all roof, thus the silence wraps it all because the ignorance is the head and the head of failure indeed.
    Dear Cacion it is just a quick reading on your poem
    best wishes
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    I enjoyed your poem, cacian.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Quote Originally Posted by Mohammad Ahmad View Post
    silence wraps it all
    because ignorance is
    a roar.
    last stanza or indeed line not a full stanza as mentioned above; here silence wraps it all is good metaphor but to say because ignorance is a roar it seems to me not a suitable description ... I think because ignorance is its roof \ its all roof, thus the silence wraps it all because the ignorance is the head and the head of failure indeed.
    Dear Cacion it is just a quick reading on your poem
    best wishes
    hello there Mohammad and thank you for reading.
    I am sorry if you do not agree but in this case sometimes loud makes too much noise it comes across as ignorance.
    It is just another way of looking at it.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    I enjoyed your poem, cacian.
    thank pou kiz_paws
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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