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    The Star Child

    It would mean the world to me if you read this super short story on wattpad and gave me some critique! Thanks!



    https://www.wattpad.com/530610171-when-you%27re-ready

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    TheFairyDogMother kiz_paws's Avatar
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    I would say that you are off to a very good start.
    I liked your writing style.
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    Fun read. I like a bit of comic book fantasy. Probably won't find many who do here. Well written. Good sentence structure. Can't judge on plot though. That's down to a future publisher.
    One mistake, I think: . "Ugh," he moaned and messaged his forehead.
    Messaged? or massaged. Hard to tell with fantasy.

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    Hey y'all, this site wont let me post a new thread but please check out this little vignette I wrote for a new series, I love feedback!

    https://www.wattpad.com/568949249-the-blue-barista

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