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    Annihilation is A Girl

    She is a landmine
    She is the gallows pole
    She is a trenchline in Normany
    She is the Stalingrad battlefield
    She is a Red Baron crashing into a dreadnought
    She is demolition-spun disaster
    A creature driven to destroy
    By utmost innocence of desire
    To be what it likes to be.
    She will not harm you
    She will not even touch you
    She will not crave to inflict damage
    Though she will utterly annihilate you
    By sheer refutation to have its strings
    Attached.
    "Existence - what does it matter? I exist on the best terms I can.
    The past is now part of my future, the present is well out of hand."

    Ian Curtis (1956-1980, Joy Division) - "Heart and Soul" (Closer, 1980)

    "My body is a cage,
    But my mind holds the key."

    Arcade Fire - "My Body is a Cage" (Neon Bible, 2007)

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    Nice piece of writing! I think the last sentence would be better replacing "refutation" with "refusal"?

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    Wow! Yes.
    As the first poem to read on this forum, I very much enjoyed this piece immensely.

    I love the idea of the destroyer not even needing to lay a finger on the victim.
    Quiet hilarious and true to the powers of a lady

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    Quote Originally Posted by Dreamwoven View Post
    Nice piece of writing! I think the last sentence would be better replacing "refutation" with "refusal"?
    Indeed.

    Should read:

    She is a landmine
    She is the gallows pole
    She is a trenchline in Normany
    She is the Stalingrad battlefield
    She is a Red Baron crashing into a dreadnought
    She is demolition-spun disaster
    A creature driven to destroy
    By utmost innocence of desire
    To be what it likes to be.
    She will not harm you
    She will not even touch you
    She will not crave to inflict damage
    Though she will utterly annihilate you
    By sheer refusal to have its strings
    Attached.
    "Existence - what does it matter? I exist on the best terms I can.
    The past is now part of my future, the present is well out of hand."

    Ian Curtis (1956-1980, Joy Division) - "Heart and Soul" (Closer, 1980)

    "My body is a cage,
    But my mind holds the key."

    Arcade Fire - "My Body is a Cage" (Neon Bible, 2007)

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    Love it. innovative

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    One more correction I should make. So:

    She is a landmine
    She is the gallows pole
    She is a trenchline in Normany
    She is the Stalingrad battlefield
    She is a Red Baron crashing into a dreadnought
    She is demolition-spun disaster
    A creature driven to destroy
    By utmost innocence of desire
    To be what it likes to be.
    She will not harm you
    She will not even touch you
    She will not crave to inflict damage
    Though she will utterly annihilate you
    By sheer refusal to have her strings
    Attached.
    "Existence - what does it matter? I exist on the best terms I can.
    The past is now part of my future, the present is well out of hand."

    Ian Curtis (1956-1980, Joy Division) - "Heart and Soul" (Closer, 1980)

    "My body is a cage,
    But my mind holds the key."

    Arcade Fire - "My Body is a Cage" (Neon Bible, 2007)

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