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    Ghoul

    Ghoul

    Slowly,
    silently it lurks, hunting
    from
    the ethereal plane.

    "Oh my ghoul!"
    "My tormentor!"
    "Why have you come
    Here?"

    To ravage my mind?
    To break
    my
    thoughts?

    My demon leers
    and
    replies.

    an endless cacophany of
    silence and
    noise fills
    my
    soul, confusion and order,
    chaos and
    clarity.

    My ghoul comes for no reason, but
    to
    set
    me
    aflame.

    (This is a work in progress so any feedback is appreciated. I was a little more daring with the spacing and line breaks than I usually am, so I'm curious whether it works or not)
    "We can easily forgive a child who is afraid of the dark; the real tragedy of life is when men are afraid of the light."
    -Plato

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    emerson1999, I really liked the poem as is. I felt it, and might say that we all have a ghoul of some sort in our lives. You hit home with me there.
    As for constructive criticism? I will leave that to another LitNetter(s), who would be more qualified to critique the piece.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    thanks for sharing, i always like reading personal pieces.

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