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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    Waiting for Nothing.

    'There must be something '
    The boy sat on a cold wooden pew.
    Whilst Latin was decantered
    For the thirsty of the few.

    I imagined there was hope
    As a comrade to fear,
    Yet hope became more hopeless
    Year on year on year.

    I walked on through all landscapes
    Making notes along the way
    And it got forever darker,
    Whilst night seeped through
    The bandage of the day.

    I've reached the end of land,
    too soon,
    An endless empty sea,
    And now I wait for nothing
    And nothing waits for me.
    Last edited by Jerrybaldy; 12-14-2017 at 07:32 PM.

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    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    A User, but Registered! tonywalt's Avatar
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    Poignant, moving, great imagery!
    Last edited by tonywalt; 12-15-2017 at 11:48 AM.

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    Yes, the imagery is beautifully done, particularly loved the lines
    Whilst night seeped through
    The bandage of the day.
    Great poem, Jerry.
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    I agree that the imagery is strong, I think the language does need a little more work, Jerry. Some lines feel forced and lacking your usual melody.
    "It is not that I am mad; it is only that my head is different from yours.”

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