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    Romance in the Decade of the Bark Beetle

    Feeling a bit cheeky asking for feedback because I hardly ever post any more, but I'm feeling rather pleased with this recent poem. Maybe we could do it like this:
    If you give me feedback, direct me to one of your own poems that you want comments on. Thanks!




    Romance in the Decade of the Bark Beetle

    A languid age, teetering indecisive between millennia,
    there's nothing in the news, just pop stars, Titanic and Francis Fukuyama.
    In this one-to-one pre-digital age,
    fading strands of the Romantics reach us through broadcast symphonies
    - Beethoven and Bonnie Tyler, Lou Reed's wild side at a seedy pub -
    and drift toward a sunlit future unaware of what's to come.

    Erudite ramblings of wild wine on sandstone walls,
    only the marble stair case witnesses the exchange of threats and poems.
    All our friends were placid turtles - Epicurean -
    admiring the reflection of their uneventful lives in hallowed ancient scrolls,
    infertile contemplations of a timid mind.
    Only us, the unacknowledged heroes,
    risen from bombed-out cities, barren homes,
    were alone
    amidst civilized men.
    Tectonic rumbling under polished ice.

    In the balmy pine wood, a solitary walker and his faithful dog
    illuminate the strangest scene: the crude and gentle force of nature,
    a synthesis long overdue: your bravado-hidden anguish,
    my young love's masterful performance - stylized but true.
    Outward-seeking spirit and receptive soul.

    Aghast, the torch-bearer scrambles - dog in tow -
    toward the glowing windows of his home
    to weave more frozen fossil patterns, safe from tempestuous devotion
    as we give birth to each other ... to ourselves.

    Nobody knows, nobody cares now in the days of Twitter,
    fragments of lives pop up like carbon bubbles and burst as soon as they appear.
    Only we remember the skill of beast and hunter,
    to face what is yours with a steady gaze,
    to tame the dying wolf within you and in turn be tamed.
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    woo hooo! Good to see you again, Sleepy!
    I enjoyed your poem, but particularly the last six lines.... awesome writing there!
    Take care,
    K♥zzo
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Love it! says alot i agree with about modern society

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    I particularly liked the ending:

    "Nobody knows, nobody cares now in the days of Twitter,
    fragments of lives pop up like carbon bubbles and burst as soon as they appear.
    Only we remember the skill of beast and hunter,
    to face what is yours with a steady gaze,
    to tame the dying wolf within you and in turn be tamed."

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    woo hooo! Good to see you again, Sleepy!
    I enjoyed your poem, but particularly the last six lines.... awesome writing there!
    Take care,
    K♥zzo
    Thanks! Hehe, I haven't been on litnet for ages because I spend way too much time on Facebook and doing other nonsense. But after a weekend on literature forums and no Facebook, I feel so much more relaxed. Maybe I'll remember to come back here regularly now and ditch anti-social media.

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    Quote Originally Posted by tonywalt View Post
    Love it! says alot i agree with about modern society
    Thanks!

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    Thank you

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    Enjoyed that poem, SW! Reminds me of past times!
    "You can always find something better than death."
    Jacob and Wilhelm Grimm, The Bremen Town Musicians

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    Quote Originally Posted by Danik 2016 View Post
    Enjoyed that poem, SW! Reminds me of past times!
    Thanks. Glad you like it

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