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    Kinbote, Illinois: A Serial

    Kinbote, Illinois is a series of flash fiction I am writing from my mud hut in rural Southern Africa.
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    Episode #1

    Of all the dirt that lay in front of me,
    I see only the brown flecks and flakes of dust
    floating from mote to mote making friends and
    discussing their philosophical woes.
    Weeds and plastic bellowing in the wind
    below towers of timber decaying,
    Dancing leaves singing overhead under
    the blue skies of fluffy floating water.
    Drumming echoes in the distance of my
    Village abode nestled in the bushes,
    Many staring children playing football
    Begging for food and fun while their mothers
    Labor away the days of their short lives.
    When I was much younger I saw only
    Beauty in the weather, though now I see
    All those of who suffer through life's error.
    Each night my lonesome dreams waken me to
    Captives loudly screaming bloody murder.
    I am standing in the country's fire,
    East of Eden in the land of erode.
    Yellow house flies, pink birds and blue flowers.

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    Interesting start. I wonder why you reference Illinois when you are from Africa.

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    Pretty cool. I lived in south africa a while, where in south africa are you living?

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    Quote Originally Posted by YesNo View Post
    Interesting start. I wonder why you reference Illinois when you are from Africa.
    Quote Originally Posted by tonywalt View Post
    Pretty cool. I lived in south africa a while, where in south africa are you living?
    I’m in the Peace Corps in Zambia. Haha.
    I’m from Illinois.

    Thanks for the replies!

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    Episode 2

    Nuggets of fire burn under her feet
    As she walks the streets at night.
    Gloom rules this girl
    Stolen from home
    Sent into servitude
    Owned by a terrible old man.
    What profane absurdity is this?
    That life comes to such an point
    Of unfortunateness.
    Hope comes and goes
    As the days pass by
    Along with the taxis
    Ferrying her around the city,
    But she can only think
    Of how it will end,
    Good or bad.
    How will she escape?
    Until this dawn arrives
    She can only wander the neon wasteland alone.

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    I like the phrase "profane absurdity".

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    Episode #3

    He was shot because hes black.

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    I think you need a little more. Who was shot and by whom?

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    Episode #4

    I dreamt of monarchs last night flying all around
    In the void between my head and yours
    Sitting in blades of golden grass floating above black soils.
    Awake! Awake sleeper of the land which is forever midnight
    where the stars are brightest and wonder is at its apogee.
    Passage through the dungeons of imagination
    where each cell is filled with plentiful characters
    from the flighty and fanciful and perilous realms of Faerie.
    Night after night the theme calls to me
    And every morning I wake to the yellow falls of sunlight on my face.
    Before my slumber I pray to the spirits of fire and God,
    Which are everywhere and are in everything.
    Bound together as spectres, phantoms in the cosmos, all pervading.
    I see you in these dreams each night sleeping by my side
    Warming my soul by the bright light held in your hands.

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    Kinbote, you write beautifully.
    I am enjoying these Episodes immensely -- keep them coming!
    Our task must be to free ourselves by widening our circle of compassion to embrace all living creatures and the whole of nature and its beauty
    ~Albert Einstein

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    Quote Originally Posted by kiz_paws View Post
    Kinbote, you write beautifully.
    I am enjoying these Episodes immensely -- keep them coming!
    Thank you for the kind words!

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    Episode #5

    Crawling on my knees through the grass
    Trying to catch a glimpse of your face
    I see a ring of light, an aura.
    It is orange.
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    Perhaps "Trying catch" should be "Trying to catch"?

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    Quote Originally Posted by YesNo View Post
    Perhaps "Trying catch" should be "Trying to catch"?
    Thanks for the catch!

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