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    It wasn't me Jerrybaldy's Avatar
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    She said

    She said I love you as she drank her coffee
    Like the cup felt heavy in her hand like her eyelids
    That blinked in slow motion in smutted lashes batting
    Dead skin flakes that floated in the vacuum of this room
    Highlighted in the beams cut between the orange flower drapes
    That were once thrown enthusiastically apart by daddy
    Stood proud in the sunrise
    Stood, proud, in the sunrise
    Now closed for the recent demise of the love
    She professed as she drank her coffee
    Like the cup felt heavy in her hand
    Like her eyelids.
    That blinked in slow motion
    As she licked the coffee drips from her lips
    And thought of sucking him
    Highlighted in the beams cut between the orange flower drapes
    That once were closed for the demise of her love.
    I love you she said as she drank her camomile tea
    Drapes parted soft forehead banging brittle panes
    Smiling in slow motion the sunrise heavy in the clouds
    Dead skin birds falling from the skies
    Sucking him hard like a lost and found dummy
    With smutted lashes and orange flowerdrapes
    I love you she said
    And I felt heavy in her hand
    Like her coffee to her lips
    Stood proud and wet
    In dead skin flakes.
    She said I love you
    As she drank her coffee
    Like the words felt heavy,
    Smutted
    Like her eye lids
    Her lips
    The dead skin birds
    Discarded chicks.
    Last edited by Jerrybaldy; 06-11-2017 at 07:15 PM.

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    I'll back with comments, don't go anywhere ...

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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    Per - you own this category, the dead and the undead. Added interest with father complex -- the orange drapes, symbolic, fits. I love you is cheap cheap lip service. Keep going with this!

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.

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