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    confidentially pleased cacian's Avatar
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    sweet

    when life
    is sweet
    it is a sugar treat
    there is a buzz about a
    feast
    nature's especial breeze
    cool as well as freeze
    everything
    you may feel decrease
    hope happyness or elite
    and abundance is the name
    of the least
    never once felt
    so pleased
    to repeat it is released
    Last edited by cacian; 05-21-2017 at 07:45 AM.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Jolly good
    Only someone as sweet as you could have written that. It makes me want to lick ice cream off you.

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    Please more respect Peter L.!!

    Cacian, I liked the beginning very much:
    "when life
    is sweet
    it is a sugar treat" I got a bit confused with that "pf"
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    I think "pf", that Danik noticed, should be "of". Nice sweet sound.

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    thank you all very much for reading and feedback
    Danick that was an of speeling error as YesNo pointed it out
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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