I really don't think I like this one. I wrote it today about a frequent customer of ours. Something about it doesn't flow right with me, any suggestions? Oh, and I don't think "depressment" is a word, but since it's in quotes is that ok? (I had a hard time coming up with something that fit there)
His balding head gleams under lights.
His gut juts out for his arms to rest on
as he sees the world in gloom of night.
There's always greener grass in his sight;
but he's all talk, with no ambition
as his balding head gleams under lights.
Joys past are his current plight.
Content to lament, he voices erudition
seeing the world in gloom of night.
He goes to find comfort where others might
but becomes annoyed, perhaps it's too bright on
his balding head gleaming under lights.
"Leave then!" our looks unite,
"Your depressment is leading us to aggression
seeing the world in gloom of night."
Such an air of disgust, no one ever right;
he is blind to a good disposition.
His balding head gleams under lights
But he sees the world in gloom of night.