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    Death's Brief Interlude

    I stumbled on a funeral march
    whose circuit had been completed
    an ebony line lay in repose
    as a somber conclave hovered
    'neath a starched canopy

    Under the patchwork tent
    time seemed to stand still
    every whimper, every cough
    sealed in a hallowed vacuum
    unspoken words in dark cavities


    Yet, above the fray


    The sun continued to migrate
    on a never ending journey
    lending unwanted balm
    divesting the melancholy air
    with pulses of regeneration

    Sad reposes radiantly transposed
    into still life portraits on a colored canvas
    dark suits glistened in the afterglow
    dilated eyes streamed mercurial watercolors
    shades of green and blue

    From my distant perch
    I exhaled death's vapors
    ingested the warm afterglow
    quivered in time's brief wake
    then felt the sun's renewed pulse
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    That is a very impressive display of imagery in support of a profound truth.

    Thanks for sharing!

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    Very nice, especially:

    "Sad reposes radiantly transposed
    into still life portraits on a colored canvas
    dark suits glistened in the afterglow
    dilated eyes streamed mercurial watercolors
    shades of green and blue "

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    Thanks for your kind comment, Alfonso. Thanks for the post mortem analysis, Taylor (just kidding). It was but a brief moment in time, but it was a memorable one.

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    Very nice poem. The beautiful phrasing speaks for itself, but I also liked the philosophical implication of continuum.

    I wrote a short story which you can find here at The Lit Net in which I used clouds in place of your use of sun but the thrust of the story is very much like your poem. At one point it also includes a scene which takes place at a cemetery. If you are inclined to look it up it's called Boats That Sail Across The Skies. Since we shared the same theme perhaps the story would mean more to you than it would to others.

    Once again, my compliments on a very nice poem and thank you for sharing it with us!
    Last edited by DATo; 03-06-2016 at 07:39 AM. Reason: spelling mistake corrected

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