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    My Laudanum

    My longing
    is a closed fist
    an assault upon the body
    watching the fragility
    of sanity fall
    to dust on the floor.

    I taste gunmetal black
    the trigger a heart beat away
    your eyes in the smoke
    I fill my lungs
    with memories.

    Convulsed
    in withdrawals
    the promise of Lethe
    hovers so close
    your words are the only
    soothing balm.

    Your lips are
    my laudanum
    when all pain fades
    and there are dreams
    of worlds far
    and away.

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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    Strong poem with incredible imagery. Oblivion... too close; too close.

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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

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    I could sense the emotional tension, perhaps anger, in the first two stanzas and the resolution in the last two. An enjoyable poem.

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    Thank you

    Deep into that darkness peering, long I stood there, wondering, fearing, doubting, dreaming dreams no mortal ever dared to dream before. ~ Edgar Allan Poe

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