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    Miaaow! Twota's Avatar
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    Brood over me

    Brood over me with a lump of sugar
    Between your Babbity Rabbity teeth.
    And pour your coffee into the saucer--
    And not the cup. Blow your lungs, sip lips--and
    Nose--and spill most of it anyway. Then tell,
    Loud and proud, how this--shall always be your way.

    Kneel near a stump, cry over years of green
    That shall never be, take a picture, write
    An elegy--with a reference to me.
    Make it your favorite spot to sit down
    And read--of unsung heroes, witches, and
    Cackling half trees.

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    Very effective. Enjoyed the tone
    and language.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    I Like the first verse and I like the the second verse. But I couldn't discover the story that links them.
    ay up

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    Great Imagery and 'cry over years of green that shall never be' is fantastic Twota. Your writing is a lot richer.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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