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    Poem:

    An Emblem of the Fall

    An apple may be nibbled
    away till all that is
    left is the core: seeds
    (and pithy bits - but not
    much more) - the germ of
    life hardened against
    Winter's hammer
    ... unto perpetuity

    11/12/2015


    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
    what if I were to bare my soul
    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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    I like the idea of "hammer" associated with winter.

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    The last few lines are awesome and I like the way you use apple seeds to unfold your theme.
    Really enjoyed.

    the germ of
    life hardened against
    Winter's hammer
    ... unto perpetuity

    Try to live in harmony with people and nature


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    Thank you ! YesNo and angliholic. The beginning is less strong than the ending; I'll let it stand for now lest I over tinker with it.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    who am I but a stitch in time
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    would you see me origami

    7-8-2015

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