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For The Vine by Coolbroman
once there was a boy named squiggletons and he was MURDERED by his bro squattingtons
he was all like “wow bro im now a goste y u do dis” and his brother was like “wow spooky goste i have just the right thing” as he whipped out his gun
he shot the goste
nothing happened
spooky
the goste mr squiggletons said “wow that was rude why i am your brother” then his bro squattingtons said
“for the vine”
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Sorry, just not enough characterization, dialogue, and exposition for me to follow along. Perhaps a couple of re-writes, then you could submit another draft for consideration.
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