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    On Twilight Island

    On Twilight Island
    Blue clouds drift thickly
    Over a sky of purple custard
    The sea a glistening green jelly
    Slow laps the beach of shiny marbles

    Distant tiny thimble ships
    With spiderweb sails
    A rainbow of fishscales
    All the iridescent towels
    And papier-mâché seagulls

    Sandcastle people pose
    For their polaroid photos
    As the sun drops mechanically
    Little by clunking little
    Into the rising horizon

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    A colorful description of the twilight milieu! It is as if you were standing on a distant cliff, nature's grand stage, watching the Day's parade drift past you. I enjoyed the pageantry!

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    I enjoyed reading that. A bit of a struggle to imagine, but fun!

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    Enjoyed. I found the retrospective of polaroid photos interesting.

    I felt compelled to muss with your poem a bit; forgive me my indulgence:

    On Twilight Island
    Blue clouds drift thickly by
    Sail upon a purple custard sky
    The sea a sheen of jelly green
    Laps slowly upon a beach of polished aggies1

    Distant tiny thimble ships
    Masts arrayed with spider-silk sails
    Fly flags: A rainbow of fish scales
    Reminiscent of iridescent towels
    Where carefree papier-mâché seagulls wheel

    Sandcastle people; selfies pose
    Eager for developed polaroid photos
    Oblivious to the mechanics of the sun
    Slipping little by clunking little
    Eager to meet the rising horizon



    1Marble (toy) - Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia: Aggie - made of agate (the next part cracks me up: ) aggie is short for agate or glass resembling agate, ..."

    I love the innocence and playfulness you bring to the forum.

    Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
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    Thankyou very much Virtuoso


    Thanks Afriendindeed


    Thankyou muchly Tailor Well done! (Actually I think this is the first time anyone has rewritten/reinterpreted one of my things - an historical moment!)

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