Hi Tailor, Your latest revision has negated the 11/11 as you've reduced L2 to 10 syllables. Keep the "from". but I don't really like "dour" as a modifier for machete.
I have a bit of a problem with "bruised severed" which does not read well and overall, the poem could use some punctuation. With such rigid adherence to form, the lack affects nuance.
Not sure about long suffering conflict. Is it the conflict which suffers?
"With hope may I secure the ripened choice fruit" is rather awkward syntax and doesn't really match the rest of the poem. "With hope, I may..." would be my choice.
Again, without proper punctuation, the meaning becomes confused in your closing lines, although I feel Voltaire would approve. The secret to happiness is to stay home and cultivate your garden...
Live and be well - H