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    The Dimension Keeper [1]

    It wasn't there. Then it was.
    A vast portal to another world. Purple, swirling like a rainbow lollipop. In I went.
    Then I was in a strange car. A man with a cap was in the front seat.
    "Where to?" He asked.
    I stood there silently. I didn't know where I was or who this man was, or what I am doing here.
    "Where.." I started," Where am I?"
    "Ahh, first timer, eh?" He replied.
    "Ummm.... yeah."
    "Well, this is the dimension highway. A gateway into any single dimension you every wanted to go to. Some are Halloween every day. Others are horrible places. Choose wisely. Oh and here is this new comer."
    He held out a watch. It had a big pad, about as big as a small cup holder. The pad was black until he tapped it. On it was a time, under the time was some text saying Dimension Highway. I couldn't understand. Just then he said,
    "This is the Dimension Escape Watch, or the DEW. Clever e-" Sirens started to blare behind us. "What the?" He yelled.
    Like on Earth, the man pulled over his vehicle, the sirens followed.
    A man whith sunglasses opened my door and pulled me out.
    "HEY!" I yelled,"What are you doing?!?!?"
    No reply.
    They kept pulling me to there black vehicle. I looked up.
    My driver was talking to another man dressed in black. He looked at me. A look of shock on his face. He just walked to his car, and drove off. He stopped the car, looked back at me.
    "Goodbye, it's over, your the keeper." He said.
    I was confused scared and lonely.
    The car blew up. Flames, orange, red, yellow colors flew everywhere.
    Everything went black.





    Thank you for reading.
    I shall continue this story later.
    If you liked it, let me know.


    And btw, this is my first story, it may suck, but eh.

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    Huh... I like the randomness. It felt like a short scatterbrained story, but that is fun in it's own way. Some small grammatical errors, though I'm not one to talk. If you post more, I'd have no qualms reading it.

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