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  1. 10-15-2014, 05:56 PM #1
    Jerrybaldy
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    Us.

    Alone in a double bed
    I like to take both sides
    I often lie and look at myself
    And stare into my eyes.
    I reach between his legs
    As he reaches between mine
    And we both know what to do
    To make us both feel fine.
    It's dark but I know his stupid face
    I can read his stupid mind
    I touch his furrowed brow
    To make me think I'm kind.
    I hold his hand to calm him
    Everything will be okay
    But I have to live with this bastard
    Every single day.
    I think he may only live
    Just here inside my brain
    But I know I need to kill him
    And I think he feels the same.
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  2. 10-15-2014, 09:17 PM #2
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    Whoa! How intriguing.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor
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  3. 10-16-2014, 06:18 AM #3
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    One day they do kill each other
    and I am ready to wager:
    the first is his loving mother,
    the second her son, the teenager.
    And now he is free and wise,
    "come to my double bed, Maud",
    he dares. And stares into her eyes,
    in violets lost, bright stud!
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  4. 10-16-2014, 07:14 AM #4
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    I agree with ampoule: whoa!
    "Im Arm der Liebe schliefen wir selig ein…" ("Liebesode" - Otto Erich Hartleben)
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  5. 10-16-2014, 02:48 PM #5
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    You can rhyme! Wow. Another good one. Where is all this coming from?
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  6. 10-18-2014, 03:09 PM #6
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    Thank you ampoule, Bar, Dieter and Auntie.
    I am not sure how clear it is, but there is only one person in this poem.
    I don't know the verse that you quoted Bar. What is it?
    Auntie..I guess I'm just in an active phase!!
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  7. 10-18-2014, 07:08 PM #7
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    Compelling indeed! You are champion in this theme.

    "But do you really, seriously, Major Scobie," Dr. Sykes asked, "believe in hell?"
    "Oh, yes, I do."
    "In flames and torment?"
    "Perhaps not quite that. They tell us it may be a permanent sense of loss."
    "That sort of hell wouldn't worry me," Fellowes said.
    "Perhaps you've never lost anything of importance," Scobie said.
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  8. 10-18-2014, 07:13 PM #8
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    Like you JB, I'm in two minds about, well everything really, except this poem

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