Drinks

[RainbowVeins]

Drinks
He’s a like a non alcoholic cocktail. He’s young. Too young to get anyone drunk off of his bright eyes and grin. However said features can make people buzzed because people can get buzzed on a sugar high. He’s slightly rambling. And doesn't have a particular structure to himself; he's easily stirred. Mixing combinations trying to find his perfect self is a current event. He changes himself everyday practically but he’s always sweet and bright. He is a non alcoholic cocktail.
He’s like a glass of wine. He’s still young. But he’s more intoxicating and at a first taste of him he’s sweet. Like rose. He’s full of enthusiasm and brightness and people are drawn to him. This is all on a first taste. Once you realize what is lurking underneath he is still intoxicating but he has a bitterness which wasn't there before. You can see it by the color of his eyes. There dark and brooding. Looking for something that they've lost. Someone they've lost. But he’s still a glass of wine.
He’s like a glass of champagne in a sparkling flute. He’s sweet. He’s beautiful. And people go back for more. That’s because of the reputation he has of being rich and bubbling with charm. And he’s full of charisma. He’s perfect. He doesn't brood. His eyes are alight with happiness. He’s sparkling. And he’s exactly the same on the inside on the out. He knows who he his he knows that he is perfect. Maybe it was an exaggeration but he really was a glass of champagne.
He was a broken glass of champagne. The front he put up had fallen. The truth was shown and it wasn't beautiful.
His eyes were empty searching again. He’s shattered. He tried to be a sparkling person who drew people in who had charm who people thought were beautiful and irresistible and addictive. And he was. But now he is shattered. He’s a brooding boy. He’s still young.But he’s bitter. It be more correct to just say he was a broken glass.
Sometimes he wishes he was like water. Something plain and dull yet needed. People didn't want something that changed so often. Someone who could be so happy yet so sad. So brilliant and sparkling yet entirely broken and empty.
People didn't want broken things. You got hurt. The shards cut you and made you hurt. So you stay away and throw away the broken glass because you would much rather have something that was full and fixed. Someone who was like champagne. Someone like wine. Someone who was just full of something. Something good something nice. Even full of something toxic. At least they were full. and everyone wants something full something right. But in a way you want the broken boy and you want to know who smashed him or if he smashed him self. And you want to know if people were leaving him empty or if he was never really full. your desire however for something whole overpowers you. So you leave the broken boy and he moves on, slowly getting himself together and then a girl with rotten honey eyes breaks him again. And you wonder if he was ever fixed.

[DATo]

This story is told very convincingly. It has a ring of truth about it. I particularly like your use of metaphor in describing the various facets of the boy's personality and the responses they evoke from others.

The only thing you might want to change is the tense of the various paragraphs. Some paragraphs begin with "He's like ..." or, "He's full ..." which denotes present tense, and later we have, "He was ..." and "His eyes were ..." which denotes past tense. It would be better if they were all written in the same tense.

The above does not detract in any serious manner from the quality of the idea you are representing, which I thought was rendered quite well. Nice job!