womanly

[cacian]

the best thing
about a woman is a man
and when she lets him down
he lets himself down
it is written on the cards
it is a gravity hard
weigh you less it hurts more
weigh you more and it feels core
blimey
I know a man when I see
one

is that a woman underneath the looks
awaiting to come close
to saying a he is a she?

who knows I am a woman
I know one when I see one.

are YOU able to tell?
or are you a man
waiting to smell
the roses of a sell?
ask you!
I bet you knew
better then I due.
I know you are true.

[PeterL]

When a man lets a woman down,
He is hurting himself.
When a woman lets a man down,
It is because she was hurt.

I know women,
And women know me.
There’s no doubt.
We are ready.

I smell her,
and she smells me.

[osho]

Is this poem a bit in the negative? Man and woman are always mutual beings notwithstanding some exceptions. And the world is not that bad now and we have ended up better off in many cases than our ancestors Both of them can perfect themselves. Why men or women have to hurt? They do it under a certain sway of things. They are loving beings and some external factors stand between them obstructively at times but in most cases they ended up behaving rationally and get in each other' arms.

[YesNo]

I was surprised by the first two lines of cacian's poem. I didn't expect the best thing to be a man. And PeterL's poem takes it back in the other direction.

[cacian]

I was surprised by the first two lines of cacian's poem. I didn't expect the best thing to be a man. And PeterL's poem takes it back in the other direction.

Hi YesNo and why not?

[cacian]

Is this poem a bit in the negative? Man and woman are always mutual beings notwithstanding some exceptions. And the world is not that bad now and we have ended up better off in many cases than our ancestors Both of them can perfect themselves. Why men or women have to hurt? They do it under a certain sway of things. They are loving beings and some external factors stand between them obstructively at times but in most cases they ended up behaving rationally and get in each other' arms.

what makes you think it is negative?
I felt it is positive it is about men's duality that they are to be a bit more in touch with their femininity.

[colb2]

My view

If women are down
Men need to be strong
If men are in doubt
Women make them belong

When trouble comes around
Men will fight
When love is abound
Women lose sight

If they form as one
Its a lovely scene
Not meant to be undone
So don't intervene

Lust's seen in the air
As if in a trance
What a sweet love affair
They must take this chance

[YesNo]

Hi YesNo and why not?

Well, I thought you might have mentioned, as the best thing about women, something distinct from a man, but you didn't and I thought that was nice and unexpected.

[cacian]

My view

If women are down
Men need to be strong
If men are in doubt
Women make them belong

When trouble comes around
Men will fight
When love is abound
Women lose sight

If they form as one
Its a lovely scene
Not meant to be undone
So don't intervene

Lust's seen in the air
As if in a trance
What a sweet love affair
They must take this chance

an excellent opening line colb2.
I enjoy your positivity it is very rare these days.
the last stanza is light and promising
I look forward to reading more.