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    Faith in her.

    So quietly she’ll wait until she has a chance
    to speak one tongue and be understood by all
    Within distant minds engaged in silent chants
    stowing away in the rhythms of beck and call
    Held by her loving arms in her devoted dance
    she promises to be by my side to catch the fall
    I give in to her embrace so that I may advance
    and slowly close in on the bright light down the hall
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    Your opening line is very good, but substitute "beck and call" for something more original.

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    Quote Originally Posted by AuntShecky View Post
    Your opening line is very good, but substitute "beck and call" for something more original.
    Sometimes the unoriginal, trite nature of an expression can help to bolster its power in certain contexts, lending a feeling of universality ("we all use the same hackneyed phrases for that which is grand and golden!").

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