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    Left 4evr Adolescent09's Avatar
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    Ferrari

    Real number lines in pale valleys
    impale the wind through lanes and alleys
    I'll run through alice while chaining my gift
    Is my hair a blip in styrofoam wings?

    Some space within organic ode
    told time to shutup so I'm told
    so paths were split to line a face
    so math was spilt within its space

    Is hair sleep or the lane
    in a print of a toe?
    The hare that drops as I fly?

    Note the wetness on the brow
    Note the wetness in the clouds
    Note the time nigh, night, and near
    Note that reality was never here.
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    My hide hides the heart inside

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    All are at the crossroads qimissung's Avatar
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    I like the way it sounds, Adolescent, although I'm not sure what it means.
    "The important thing is not to stop questioning. Curiosity has its' own reason for existing." ~ Albert Einstein
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    Nice idea of space telling time to shut up. I was expecting the fourth line to rhyme with the third, but perhaps it doesn't matter. The last line was pretty good. It brings one back around to the first word on line 1.

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