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    lyrical

    i don't believe
    it's miracle
    to speak about
    the physical
    atonement is
    possible
    when visible is
    missible
    soluble lies
    lyrical
    minus the mythical
    what hades
    maybes
    chronical says peace
    to darkened rays
    the feast
    but when precision
    says is
    attention pays
    fees
    prestigious weighs
    least
    plausible may
    ease.
    Last edited by cacian; 04-28-2013 at 03:14 AM.
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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    Thumbs up A First time to Eat

    I must
    make you aware
    I've never been
    one to care
    for poety
    in stages
    written only in one
    place on pages

    In the past it has always seemed to me like a trick to keep us from noticing that something isn't written very well. But I must eat my words. There's a first time for everything.

    This is a well done poem. You've "converted" me. (now if someone could convince me that a poem is still a poem, even if it doen't rhyme.)
    Love L-L

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    Laura-Lee thank you so much for reading and feedback
    I like your little piece ' A First time to eat' it is very swift and to the point
    it may never try
    but when it does it sigh
    it is just that
    good
    it fly

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