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    The Wrong planet ...

    Look at my eyes ... He shouts at her ... You... impolite girl... and he slaps her on her face ...
    She...
    Impolite girl ...shuts her dead eyes and never looked at their eyes again...



    Throw the ball to us from your balcony ... You... mean girl ... u wanna steal our ball ...
    She...
    mean girl ... wanna throw herself from the balcony to play with them ...yet, throws the stolen ball...


    Stand in queue with your fellow students ... You ... stupid girl ... this is not your class nor are those your fellows ...

    She...
    stupid girl... has fellows yet cannot recognize... has a class yet cannot tell which one ...



    Keep dancing and singing ... You... tall girl ... what are you doing in grade 1...
    She...
    tall girl... taller than girls in grade 1 and smaller than girls in grade 3..



    Behave and salute our visitors and relatives ... You ...bad girl ... we are ashamed of you ...
    She ...
    bad girl ...ashamed of herself... yet cannot salute the others and doesn't know how to behave ...



    Join us and share in the conversation ... You... arrogant girl ... do you think you're better than us ...
    She...
    arrogant girl..feels one with everything ... yet does not share anything with anyone ...


    Pay attention to your spelling ... you... reckless girl ... Why don't you do what I say...

    She...
    reckless girl... cares very much about spelling yet always forgets the letters order...




    Stand with your face on the wall... You... Lazy girl... Why don't you study more ...
    She ...
    lazy girl.. spends hours in studying ... yet doesn't know anything ...



    I love you ... You ... Bear ...
    She ...
    loves him ... yet breaks up with him because he thinks she is ugly and fat ...



    Read these ambiguous sentences .. You ... brilliant student ... why everyone solve this exercice correctly except you ...

    She...
    Brilliant student ... studies grammar very well ... yet doesn't know why she failed this one ...



    Go to the right then to the left then to the right then to left then cross the road to the grossery shop ...
    You ... slow girl ... Why are you always late ...

    She ...
    Slow girl ...
    walks very fast ... yet doesn't know which is right and which is left ...




    Speak to us ... You ... boring girl ... how could you keep silent all this time ...

    She...
    boring girl ... speaks very well... yet cannot utter any word in public...



    Wear your dress and enter the hall... You...jealous sister ... you should dance in your sister's wedding ...

    She ...
    jealous sister ... is so excited ... yet the wedding ended and she couldn't enter the hall..



    Cry ...say something ... You ... evil aunt ... are'nt you sad because you niece died ...

    She ...
    evil aunt ... is so sad ... yet she laughs when she is sad ...
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    There's something about this that conveys two opposing sides of the narrator (or her life) quite effectively. It's an extremely original way of describing personal conflict.

    I have to admit that there are too many ellipses (. . .) to make this an easy read, and maybe too many examples of the narrator being found wanting by her peers or her family. But interesting nonetheless,

    H

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    Hi Hill missed you
    These are snapshots of the life of an autistic girl who is ignorant of her status and others who are also ingnorant of it and always misjudge her.

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