There's a rawness to many of these that greatly appeals to me and the line about "letting our flavors dance like a virus in harmony" is the effing real McCoy! Even if we (or I) don't understand its literal meaning, it has its own authority.
But speaking of "effing," please don't over-use ****. In "Take me," for example, the line "**** me" just doesn't have the punch you intend it to; to me, it somehow felt as if you were self-consciously being naughty and were proud of it.