The ferries are fun... Seattle has so much to offer
The best I had to offer for our impromptu Word Can poem came out a bit abstract:
My Word Can poem from our Thursdays at Two poetry group 8/17/2023: lighten,pearl, descent, symbolize, in mist, jabber, confess
she had symbolize
she had symbolize
a lightening of pearl descent
I confess
in mists she wandered
seeking light as
mockingbirds jabbered
8/17/2023
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
re: I don´t think so, the images are very clear. I´m only a bit in doubt of using "lightening" here. Maybe I would use "rain" but it would change the meaning and the number of syllables. And is it not perhaps: "she had symbolized"?
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
It made sense when I wrote it... let me try an analysis of my own poem:
"she had symbolize"...
I laser focused on "ize" as eyes and instantly I had my protagonist (I like eyes).
The "symbol" came along for the ride since it was there and maybe could be a euphemism, used in toto, for "wide eyed" as in eyes the size of a cymbal, perhaps symbolic of innocence and purity.
"a lightening of pearl descent"...
Perhaps alluding to "The Birth of Venus" painting by the artist Sandro Botticelli .
"I confess"... straight forward - I had to put "confess" somewhere and time was moving; moving on...
This part of the poem is a bit more straightforward in my mind:
"in mists she wandered"...
Living in the natural world not contentedly
"seeking light as"...
Seeking enlightenment/peace/spirituality...
"mockingbirds jabbered"...
Those who live in the natural world mocking/deriding her decision to seek beyond the natural world.
10+ minutes isn't much time to write under pressure and I trusted Parker on this one as the ink flowed.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 08-19-2023 at 10:41 AM. Reason: (lol) illusory > alluding
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
I see! 10 minutes is indeed little time to write a poem.
I liked the poem, I only thought there might be a "d" missing at the end of "symbolize" as it seemed that the action had been completed in the past.
The second strophe is indeed very clear! It is the one I prefer.
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
My Word Can poem from our Thursdays at Two poetry group 9/7/2023: tile, habitat, crouch, technique, announce
the cheetah
master of its habitat
the cheetah is
short on technique
but long on speed -
first crouching it
ambushes its prey with
a blazing sprint
but sometimes birds
will mob or savanna
creatures may bark
to otherwise announce
its intention at the start
leading to a futile hunt
9/7/2023
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Enjoyed the poem. Lol moment: tile-futile
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
An anaphora exercise using famous first lines (superscript) and my fill not bolded.
He Who is a Poet
"Here lies a man cut off by fate"1
"He wakes, who never thought to wake again,"2
"He wasn’t dumb. His intellect was sound"3 -
he having recovered from a mild stroke
He glanced over at his dear departed wife
"He coveted her portrait."4 and paused to reflect -
"Her cheek was wet with North Sea spray,"5
He then made his way from his bedchamber
"He opens the scullery door, and a sudden rush"6 of
heretofore hidden servants appear to assist him…
"He sat in a wheeled chair, waiting for dark"7 and mused:
"Here I sit,"8 (gathering parchment, ink, and pen)
"Here's to the mice that scare the lions,"9
"He who writes a poem opens a window."10 and is set free!
1 - Friedrich Schiller; Epitaph
2 - Rupert Brooke; The Life Beyond
3 - Wilhelm Busch; Crazy a translation of “Der Narr”
4 - Vachel Lindsay; The Moon Is A Painter
5 - Sir Arthur Conan Doyle; By The North Sea
6 - Paul Muldoon; Tell
7 - Wilfred Owen; Disabled
8 - Brittany Ann; Here I Sit
9 - Vachel Lindsay; Here's To The Mice!.
10 - Mário Quintana; Emergency
and my Word Can poem ( eleven participants !!! )...
Word Can poem: collapse, mix, tradition, compassion, junior, Wednesday, suddenly, colony, weak, druid, admit
Wednesday’s Child Has Far to Go
T’was Wednesday
Knock on wood - a weakness I admit
Born of druidic tradition with perhaps
A færie mix
The necessity came suddenly
From my gobsmacked collapse
I, the junior in our party
When we came upon a colony
Deep in an ancient forest
A moot of Ents who ministered
To my needs in offering compassion
For my relapse
9/21/2023
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 09-23-2023 at 12:04 AM. Reason: format / comparison>compassion
Forgive me the formatting of the above... the Edit Post function is being unkind.
update: format and errors corrected
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 09-23-2023 at 12:05 AM. Reason: update
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Never mind the formatting, The function doesn´t work very well on Litnet. I suppose the whole poem is a line below the other.
"He who is a poet" loved this anaphoric exercise and the inclusion of Schiller, Busch and Quintana, the later somehow releasing the poem to the world. Will try a similar exercise but I need time.
"Wednesday’s Child Has Far to Go"- Good synthetic form in spite of eleven words. Enjoyed!
Confirming: The relapse is the knock on wood?
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Thanx!
re: "Confirming: The relapse is the knock on wood?" - in my under the clock haste I envisioned knocking on wood with respect to knocking on an Ent in error. Also my word list contain(ed) a transcription error "comparison" in the list should be "compassion" as I used it in the poem correctly
update: corrected
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 09-23-2023 at 12:08 AM. Reason: update
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
Word Can poem: tribute, minute, constant, modest, brim, under, notion
a salt spray ocean tang
a salt spray ocean tang
greets me on the shore
under calm gray skies -
a tribute to the constant
modest notions that fill
my brainpan to the brim
- a positive meniscus of
waves of thought when
viewed - anything but
minute from within -
inspired by the simple act
of walking on the shore
10/5/2023 r.
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
Last edited by tailor STATELY; 10-06-2023 at 05:48 AM. Reason: syntax
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Charming, serene poem!
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
My Thursdays at Two assignment for 10/19/2023: Sea creature
Acrostic by tailor
“Maybe that's what life is... a wink of the eye and winking stars.” - Jack Kerouac
Staring upwards I await to ambush; I’m
“the meanest things in creation"1 -
a byname I've earned by those hazarding my
rough mouth revealing razor teeth - with a
gaze that would curdle milk I'm told
and a surprise near my dead eyes to
zap the unwary with a jolting shock of
electricity if disturbed whilst pondering,
resting in the seabed feigning indifference
10/19/2023 1 - Ichthyologist William Leo Smith
Ta ! (short for tarradiddle),
tailor
tailor
who am I but a stitch in time
what if I were to bare my soul
would you see me origami
7-8-2015
Lol. A crocodile, maybe? Enjoyed.A bit perplexed by the small number 1 that appears near the date,
"I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row
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