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    In Love

    A rewrite of an earlier poem. All comments are welcomed!



    Escaping
    dark dreams
    my repose is disrupted
    by the tall
    black-haired wind
    which floods the sky.

    could I kiss
    those leaves
    which bend
    toward the water
    like pale hands.

    the face tilted downwards
    cries a long laugh
    I cannot discriminate
    it halts, stoops, wavers
    clutches its bottle
    drinks
    and the embrace of the memory
    is gone.

    Rainbow imitations, like words
    scattered throughout the room,
    land on the sofa,
    sitting with the laughing children.

    Imitations of the ripple
    of her silence
    her lack of amazement
    that picks up the colorful thread
    of a story.

    The story wanders,
    I do not return,
    and a touch of amber
    blunts the sun.

    Gemlike, her speech unheard
    passes away -
    no bird calls
    so quietly.

    What musical mistake
    passes on the idea of her cowardice,
    my staunchness? Unheard, the notes flutter away.

    Into long darknesses
    festive winters
    ghosts of dreamy afternoons
    into thorns which catch
    the rawness of my hand
    into streets that walk
    away, into the night,
    and into the water.

    No maze wanders like this.

    The bone glistens like skin
    and she is in love
    Last edited by Lykren; 12-29-2012 at 12:50 AM.
    if not, winter - Sappho

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    I found this to have many creative images. I have read it a few times and just wanted to share that I particularly liked the first 2 stanzas.
    Last edited by Buh4Bee; 12-31-2012 at 08:04 AM.

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    Thank you so much, Buh4Bee.
    if not, winter - Sappho

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