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    Talking He

    He found me a pearl and does not want to know if I have lost it
    or ever looked at it
    He lets me swim, a happy fish on a wave,
    takes me to where the sands end...
    He never asks.
    He tells me stories of me...
    The Empress-Me, the Mermaid-Me,
    The Frog-Me
    I lose wood for fire. We shiver with the grass together.
    Night comes, night thickens, night sinks,
    We listen to dawn breaking with the winds..
    He holds my shadow in his arms
    Careful, as if it would spill
    He does not want to know where my boat went down
    We are going to find strong oars once it's morning.
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    Deceptively simple.
    I can't explain why I like this so much -

    He holds my shadow in his arms
    Careful, as if it would spill


    Lovely image - great piece of writing.

    H

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    I agree with H about this one. There is no possible alternative to this good relationship without getting into ambiguity. A postmodern piece.

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    I thought this was a lovely read Little Gal and great imagery. The red font seemed out of sync with the poem though.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    Little Wave, this is absolutely adorable, wonderfully written (except for the red font!), I love it from the first to the last word! it's an outstanding poem, Gal!

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    Ores or oars ?

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    Quote Originally Posted by hillwalker View Post
    Deceptively simple.
    I can't explain why I like this so much -

    He holds my shadow in his arms
    Careful, as if it would spill


    Lovely image - great piece of writing.

    H
    I thank you... this one is very, very close to my heart... and I can't help feeling glad at any word of appreciation.

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    @Delta...

    I am sorry about the color... I have a particular fascination for red ..
    And thank you!
    Last edited by Little Gal; 11-25-2012 at 03:47 AM.

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    Quote Originally Posted by cafolini View Post
    I agree with H about this one. There is no possible alternative to this good relationship without getting into ambiguity. A postmodern piece.
    thank you..

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    Quote Originally Posted by Bar22do View Post
    Little Wave, this is absolutely adorable, wonderfully written (except for the red font!), I love it from the first to the last word! it's an outstanding poem, Gal!
    I love being called 'little wave'... it makes me extraordinarily happy! thank you so much, your words are always so straight and clear, saying what they mean...
    I wish u happiness...

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    yeah 'oars' ... thank you

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    Very intimate. A good read.

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    Very feminine and many good mataphors and I have to agree with Hill...

    He holds my shadow in his arms
    Careful, as if it would spill
    is sublime.


    I am not sure where the boat ends and you begin. Nor do I have to be. Its a great poem.

    JB

    For those who believe,
    no explanation is necessary.
    For those who do not,
    none will suffice.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Buh4Bee View Post
    Very intimate. A good read.
    Thank you so much... feels incomplete without a word from you!

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    Quote Originally Posted by Jerrybaldy View Post
    Very feminine and many good mataphors and I have to agree with Hill...



    is sublime.


    I am not sure where the boat ends and you begin. Nor do I have to be. Its a great poem.

    JB
    JB... I cannot thank you enough... loved your words " I am not sure where the boat ends and you begin. Nor do I have to be." Am so tired of people asking for explanations for everything... it is a relief to let things be a little on their own!

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