Hi guys, for those that read my first post you will know that there was a lot of work needed! So I've been busy and here's what I've been doing so far...
1. The prologue has been thrown out for a brief introduction, I'm not certain if it work better or is even needed but I thought I'd try it
2. I've included the first paragraph of chapter one, the content is the same but is written a little differently and I just want to see if it read any better :/
Introduction
Lintukoto: The World As It Is Today
For over half of a century the islands of Lintukoto have ridden the winds above an endless ocean of clouds that reach out to the horizon in every direction, breaking only when reaching the sky itself. The individual segments of the islands are held together in their movement by a series of rope bridges built by the inhabitants, the Lintu.
There are few amongst these people that are alive today who are old enough to have within them the memories of how the islands came to be, who remember what came before them. Above the clouds, these people have a new life and for many it is not important or even relevant what came before them but for some it will be everything.
Chapter One
Kave: A New Moon
Kave stood under the dark sapphire blanket of the night sky admiring his work as he did every night, surrounded by the long grass that grew on the northern most island. The stars sparkled like the reflections of fireflies on still water as the night sky breathed a silent breeze of tranquility across the islands, a stillness that echoed the calm in his heart. He had painted the moon above in the image of his wife Ilmatar and it had filled his beating heart with a warm pride, a feeling that contradicted the cold glow of the pale white arc that now stood amongst the stars.
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