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    Thanks for reading tailor. Glad you enjoyed it ��

    Live and be well - H

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    I had a great time reading this enthralling poem of yours. Much appreciated.

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    Thanks, angliholic. Glad you enjoyed it

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    Enjoyed reading "Catching up"!

    Like someone wrote about, the deeper meanings of the poem are subtly dislocated to the marks of time and trivial (eating) action.

    Two persons meet for a coffee ( the waiting person is probably a woman) to see what remained of a once more close
    The time of both doesn´t quite match. The food matches better.
    But the meeting seems to be limited to that coffee and by that place:

    "I sip and listen to vicarious adventures,
    occasionally contributing a memory
    of somewhere we've both been,
    and then our cups are empty."

    At the end, when both watch the place preparing to close, there is a feeling of something wanting in the air. The time of the meeting is running out.
    "I seemed to have sensed also from an early age that some of my experiences as a reader would change me more as a person than would many an event in the world where I sat and read. "
    Gerald Murnane, Tamarisk Row

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    Hi Danik, Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I don't write much these days; I seem to spend most of my spare time with music, but it is pleasant to look back and remember. Perhaps I should work towards having more spare time, which is sort of self defeating

    Live and be well - H

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    Quote Originally Posted by Hawkman View Post
    You arrived first, as you always do
    and I arrived late, as usual.
    Your coffee has been poured already,
    so I must order.

    We say hello, as we always do
    and you turn your cheek
    for friendship's kiss
    and I sit and listen to your news.

    At last, my beverage arrives,
    with its matching foam and sprinkles,
    the biscuit in the saucer
    could be the twin of yours.

    I used not to drink cappuccino,
    not until you taught me to.
    Like Hancock, I had no need
    of froth in my life.

    It's been a year, so we catch up,
    with time's interlude ignored.
    Your son, now twenty-two,
    was eight when I met you.

    I sip and listen to vicarious adventures,
    occasionally contributing a memory
    of somewhere we've both been,
    and then our cups are empty.

    Lots more to be said
    and it's too soon yet to part.
    I ask if you'd like another,
    you say yes, but decline my offer of a bun.

    I treat you to a Madeleine anyway,
    and we talk and watch from the balcony
    as the coffee shop empties
    and chairs are put up on tables.
    I would just take out "as usual" in the second line, not really needed. Also "I used not to drink cappuccino" first line of 4th stanza is a bit confusing. I like the end, "put up on the tables" and imagine chairs being put on top of tables.

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