The Art of Constructive Criticism

[Jeos]

When what you have to say
can only be bad
then do not say it -
destruction and self-destruction
are almost for free
Gone are the days when
we could drink rainwater
and moreover – who cares ?
All roads lead to the same destination ...

when what you have to say
can only be bad
just shut it up - be generous...!

When what you have to say
Is good and bad then do not forget
watering and trimming,
do not let it wither away...

the spider’s web of prejudice & clan:
- lift you above all that in you is small...

when what you have to say
is good and bad then do not forget
do not let it wither away - be generous ..!

And when what you have to say
can only be good
then use that pair of wings (kind of)
that God gave you - be generous...
but without forgetting that
"the higher we are the worst is the fall "
and that the obesity of flattery
will not dampen that fall

... what have you to say...?

[E.A Rumfield]

In the last bit you write (kind of) I would lose that. Also you write...

"the higher we are the worst is the fall "
and that the obesity of flattery
will not dampen that fall

I always try to avoid using the same word so closely together. I would switch it up.

I'm not great at the art of constructive criticism, just some thoughts.

[Jeos]

In the last bit you write (kind of) I would lose that. Also you write...

"the higher we are the worst is the fall "
and that the obesity of flattery
will not dampen that fall

I always try to avoid using the same word so closely together. I would switch it up.

I'm not great at the art of constructive criticism, just some thoughts.

Thanks; Rumfield your "Between the sand and the Stars" is just great !

Did you read The Song of Descendancy ? My most recent one.

[E.A Rumfield]

Yes I like it very much. We are all made from the things that came before us, right.

[Jerrybaldy]

Hmmmmm. Having to bare management tricks as most of us do and the diplomacy of friendship, I would rather now that somebody say to me ' Jerry, that is crap' . It let's you know where you are for sure. Better that, for me, than to be served with sugar.

As for the religious undertone, that, to me, is crap.

[miyako73]

That's right, Baldy. Too much patronizing already in this forum. It's tough to discern what's good enough if everything seems the best.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

The writers only have themselvs to blame for the over-patronization of what are usually mediocre at best works. I don't comment anymore, because anytime I, or anyone else, criticizes a work, people just whine and moan and it turns into petty arguments. I find it ironic that you're complaining about it, miyako.

[miyako73]

a criticism must be good too as it is also a form of writing.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

[Charles Darnay]

Alexander pope

[miyako73]

Read Auntshecky's critiques. That's what I'm talking about.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Reconsidered. Everyone here is such an amazing writer!

[miyako73]

I'll be the first one to tell you that my writings suck. That's why I need a good critique/critic that/who will not change my voice but help me see other voices.

[Mutatis-Mutandis]

Your writings don't suck. Maybe overly bleak at times, but they don't suck.

[Jeos]

Ladies and Gentlemen...I enjoyed the debate!

To each according to their tendencies & instincts.