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    The Coconut Boat Song

    On a crafty raft of coconuts
    I ride the stormy seas
    Waves crash around us
    Like a swarm of killer bees

    Or wasps. With their icy
    Oceanic stings they whip
    Burning my naked flesh
    Occasionally we take a dip

    My little craft and me
    And up above again gasp
    As to the rotten strings
    What hardly hold I clasp

    From the coast of Tahiti
    To the mountains of Africa
    The islands of Ireland
    And the shores of America

    We bounce and bob and bash
    In a boat not quite a boat
    Amid the swirls and spray
    My vessel seems barely afloat

    Beneath the skies of lightning
    And the clouds and thunder
    As rain and hail smash us
    We'll soon be going under

    Down to where Atlantis lay
    And shipwrecks of the past
    Spanish silver, gold bullion
    Mayhap my ship will last

    Until we arrive at a land
    Never visited before today
    A land of grass and forest
    One with welcoming bay

    Live there eating coconuts
    And colourful native fruit
    Some yams for some jams
    Forever - sounds a total hoot!
    Last edited by MystyrMystyry; 07-12-2012 at 08:54 AM.

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    Everybody get on the coconut boat!







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    Goddess Creativity sends all the blessings upon you, only upon you... we, grey citizens of the poetic society have to content ourselves with mere crumbs! Since the time you were riding the waves of the ocean saddled in a fridge, your voyages get modernized and your enthusiasm knows no limits!

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    I adore your boundless sense of imagination.
    I used to be a Feminist ©? But now I just shut up and take it

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    Thankyou JackoH!

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    Thankyou Delta-o!

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    Despite a couple of teeny lapses in meter in some of the lines, I like this one much better than the one with the green eyebrows.

    You had me at "crafty raft."

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    Thanks for the ride, I'm still looking for my coconut though. Good c"raft".

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    Thanks Aunty

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    could be used for singing...or on a rhyme contest.
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    who makes and keeps his self-made laws

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