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    Intimate Stranger

    Your, brushing lens stroke my ebony locks

    The fibers bristle from the static friction,

    then settle back into their coiffed grooves,

    as twilight sunbeams trawl down my lattice,

    then disperse into the immersing shadows



    After an interval, you cast a soothing glance

    Your soft eyes warm my basted cheeks,

    as Lava lamp bulbs, streaming my way

    heating the waxy gloss on my face,

    mellowing, rose petals blush brightly,

    until your orbs descend my horizon



    In due course, from your deep, dark lids

    a cosmic glint radiates into my orbit

    A meteoric wave hurdles in my direction

    showering my pallid neck with sparkling dust

    illuminating the graceful creases, delicate seams

    My neck arches upward as a majestic spire,

    then settles back into place as the dust

    trail scatters into the icy stillness



    After a brief pause, frothy flares explode my way

    striking the sealed flanks of my bosom ramparts

    The flashing powder-burns titillate my swelling paps,

    then the shocking glare fades seeping into the

    tranquil abyss
    Last edited by virtuoso; 01-22-2014 at 04:45 PM.

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    I felt rather lost in all the silk and powder of the poem - its flamboyance. Some poems are meant to be read while others would do far better when performed. This imho is one of those.
    Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb

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    It is a descriptive poem. Maybe overly so! I guess to each his own! Sorry it did not titillate your taste buds. I appreciate your honest, unabridged opinion. I guess I am a sentimental sucker!

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