A Pome What I Wrote

[Hawkman]

(Sorry, I couldn't resist)

130 Words

I ain’t a cat
not Schrödinger’s or logic’s

I ain’t a dog
not an imperialist’s running one, anyway

I ain’t a mouse
I ain’t a rat
ain’t got a house
ain’t got a flat

but I versify
diversify
in freedom’s form—
it seems the norm

I do sums with words
and lettuce
which is algebra
of sorts: vegetable poetry
for cabbages

with slug lines:

INT. THE POET’S MIND – DAY

Don’t run away
just watch and learn
don’t spurn my efforts to amuse
I’ll edify you if I choose
or not

We gotta stop the rot

What say?
Decay!
No thanks
Keep the rust at bay with polish
dress the pitted surface with a layer of gloss:
keep rolling and you’ll stay free of moss

That’s deep

Now go to sleep

[PrinceMyshkin]

Does the term freaking genius mean anything to you? It ought to. This is great fun. Thanks a ton!

[cogs]

ah i love your wit. what i'm missing (and this is the reader speaking), are transitional bridges within the overall coherent scope of the poem. perhaps it's the prose writer in me, spilling 'readership' into shortcut lines. that unintentional effect is ironic, isn't it?

[Hawkman]

Prince: Freaking? I take it you imply that genius is unhinged, or at least, that portion of which you seem to imply I might be posessed If so, and if I do, you are probably right - LOL. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, as always.

cogs: Hi, and thanks for reading. Transitions hmmm. The poem is sort of set out as a rant, or one-sided conversation. The narrator begins by stating what he is not, and hasn't got, proceed to what he does and how he does it, and then continues with is reaction to the audience's reaction to his tirade. There is, I think, a logical progression in this soliloquy. I leave it to the reader to insert their own reactions as responses to the various elements of the speech

Glad you thought it witty

Live and be well - H

[PrinceMyshkin]

Prince: Freaking? I take it you imply that genius is unhinged, or at least, that portion of which you seem to imply I might be posessed If so, and if I do, you are probably right - LOL. I'm delighted you enjoyed it, as always.

I take it you are being, how you say. disingenuous, and that you know freaking stands here in place of some naughty Anglo-Saxonism

[Hawkman]

Ahh, well it's a while since I did any of that, all I have is the madness

LLAP - H

[cogs]

yes, you're right that it does have a logical progression. perhaps the readers' mental response is what i'm 'reading' into this, with the idea of transition. perhaps you intentionally cast out an image, and see how readers swim around it. i do not wish you to change, since the lines definitely dynamically explain themselves.

[firefangled]

Fun and interesting. Almost a nursery rhyme, I think. I do like the way the way narrator is presented n such an unpretentious way, considering the subject matters of his/her rant.

[cacian]

Hi Hawkman I liked the first one especially the first/second/third and fourth stanzas.
Just a question
what does a Pome mean?

[Hawkman]

cogs: Thanks again and I'm glad you think so

ff: not sure about the nursery rhyme, I think it's more of an anti-lullaby - lol. I guess it's the last line that does it I had in mind the kind of person who takes his sopbox to speaker's corner Thanks for reading.

cacian: Pome is a deliberate misspelling of poem, a hint to this is included in the bad grammar of the thread's title. I'm glad that you especially liked some of it.

Live and be well - H

[Delta40]

Are we starting a new trend here? Is it possible to fail?

[Hawkman]

Are we starting a new trend here? Is it possible to fail?

You've lost me here, Delta. It's always possible (though undesirable) to fail I do hope you don't think I have - LOL

[Delta40]

I'm getting the impression that these poems are a tacit 'stab'

[miyako73]

Yes, Delta. The arrogant "Edify" will give you an idea.

Like a bamboo, I, too, just want to grow.

[Hawkman]

Poems? I've only written one of these. That it mocks pretentiousness can't be denied, but I still don't see the connection to your first comment.

Live and be well - H