by 'oblique', do you mean "the ubiquitous and dark obelisk"? i can understand if you want to keep things mysterious. i guess my metaphors are mostly based in something that i actually do want the reader to decipher, since my poem is set in their minds when they reread with new perspective.
I really enjoyed the experience of reading that piece Alex. I know that my knowledge of poetry is limited but anyone is entitled to say what they like and what they don't like and I was carried off across time on this. Beautiful.
Success is not forever and failure is not fatal
"As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung
"To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists
"I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers
I can't edit and delete this one too, could a mod do me a favor and delete it?