by 'oblique', do you mean "the ubiquitous and dark obelisk"? i can understand if you want to keep things mysterious. i guess my metaphors are mostly based in something that i actually do want the reader to decipher, since my poem is set in their minds when they reread with new perspective.
I really enjoyed the experience of reading that piece Alex. I know that my knowledge of poetry is limited but anyone is entitled to say what they like and what they don't like and I was carried off across time on this. Beautiful.
Before sunlight can shine through a window, the blinds must be raised - American Proverb
"As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung
"To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists
"I'm on my way, from misery to happiness today. Uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh" --The Proclaimers
I can't edit and delete this one too, could a mod do me a favor and delete it?