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    A Fool for Spring

    A Fool For Spring

    Do be on the lookout,
    A woman stumbling,
    Bumbling like a bee full of nectar,
    Her eyes glazed, dazed,
    Her fragrance-crazed face emerging
    From a neighbor's lilac bush,
    Drool from her contorted lips
    Falling over hidden blooms of grape hyacinths,
    Yellow daffodils;
    Who, along the road, is known
    for uncontrollable gasps and outbursts,
    “Look! A redbud!!”


    Ampoule, April TwentyFirst, TwoThousandTwelve
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    I could so easily read this as a hard hitting party girl from the night before. In fact, it fits just right in my mind. Probably not without attraction though...!
    The Rotten Apple Injures its Neighbour

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    LOL...never thought of that! Thanks, Delta!
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    How could one not enjoy this one? Celebrate spring!

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    Quote Originally Posted by ampoule View Post
    LOL...never thought of that! Thanks, Delta!
    I don't know about you ampoule but when somebody else interprets my poems differently and I think 'oh yeah!' I marvel at the reader but also how I didn't notice it myself!
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    Quote Originally Posted by Delta40 View Post
    I don't know about you ampoule but when somebody else interprets my poems differently and I think 'oh yeah!' I marvel at the reader but also how I didn't notice it myself!
    I'm right there with you, Delta. Once I let go of a poem, it belongs to the reader.
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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    So juicy! So full of wise folly! I loved it.

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    This piece made me smile, ampoule. That last line reminded me of the running joke on Family Guy with James Woods where they're trying to "capture" him by setting out pieces of candy and he keeps following the trail and picking up each piece going "ooh, a piece of candy!" Although, I feel given the subject matter you could've had some more fun by messing the with the form a bit, eg, instead of "centering" it on the page you could've played around with indents and steps and spaces and whatnot. As it is on the page it seems to balanced to reinforce what's being described. But it's a very humorous piece regardless.
    "As far as we can discern, the sole purpose of human existence is to kindle a light of meaning in the darkness of mere being." --Carl Gustav Jung

    "To absent friends, lost loves, old gods, and the season of mists; and may each and every one of us always give the devil his due." --Neil Gaiman; The Sandman Vol. 4: Season of Mists

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    Good to see you posting here again.

    The best part of this piece is the opening line.

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    Quote Originally Posted by MorpheusSandman View Post
    This piece made me smile, ampoule. That last line reminded me of the running joke on Family Guy with James Woods where they're trying to "capture" him by setting out pieces of candy and he keeps following the trail and picking up each piece going "ooh, a piece of candy!" Although, I feel given the subject matter you could've had some more fun by messing the with the form a bit, eg, instead of "centering" it on the page you could've played around with indents and steps and spaces and whatnot. As it is on the page it seems to balanced to reinforce what's being described. But it's a very humorous piece regardless.
    Oooo, Morpheus, I really like your suggestions. Thanks!
    I'm in love with The Vinegar Man and Mr. Tanner, but be careful, it could just as easily be you.

    "If you're going to write you better have somewhere to come from." Flannery O'Connor

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