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    My Way...

    My way to waters green
    On which the trees gaze
    Far off can the day be seen
    On melting mountains laid
    Warm shades up and down
    Of summerís green
    By autumn browned
    At a fairyís touch a breath resounds
    To where my little way walks down.

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    What a gorgeous, sweet little poem you've made here!

    I love these last four lines:

    'Of summer’s green
    By autumn browned
    At a fairy’s touch a breath resounds
    To where my little way walks down.'

    Very magical, and whimsical.

    I might suggest not using 'green' twice, though. Yet, since it was separated by several lines, it could very well be fine the way it is. Plus, I like green.
    There is no such thing as a moral or an immoral book. Books are well written or badly written. ~Oscar Wilde.

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    Quote Originally Posted by BookBeauty View Post
    What a gorgeous, sweet little poem you've made here!

    I love these last four lines:

    'Of summerís green
    By autumn browned
    At a fairyís touch a breath resounds
    To where my little way walks down.'

    Very magical, and whimsical.

    I might suggest not using 'green' twice, though. Yet, since it was separated by several lines, it could very well be fine the way it is. Plus, I like green.
    Poetry is magic for me... I like staying in its spell...
    I had a lot of green before me and in my mind when I thought about this one... it sort of came in without me being really aware...
    Thank you... it is a lovely thing to be appreciated thus...

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    My ways to waters green makes me miss the dew on grass

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    Quote Originally Posted by Devilio View Post
    My ways to waters green makes me miss the dew on grass
    you are quite a poet urself.. Devilio... don't you think?

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